Truth by Shane

Truth By Shane

 

Laying in the moonlight, staring at the stars,
trying to figure out what is right,
the glow of the many fireflies, flying lazily around in jars,
this peaceful bliss, remember this, as you slip off into pleasant dreams,
All may be quiet here but not all is as it seems

War rages on, across the endless sea, Selfish people con, while all the time we dread, those hated phantoms we cannot see,
the human spirit never rests till it thrist for blood is slaked,
whether it is murder or cries for justice, the embers of war have been raked

And my friends remember this as well, it is only humanities fault, that our once beautiful earth has become a living hell, with so much strife, living life is as difficult as can be, if we could only see, we're causing so much pain, what is there to gain, from destroying peaceful memories

Some of us have always seen, the destruction that has been, blinding us and knocking us down, all we ever do is sin

We can remedy this hell, get out of this jail cell if we only joined together, and as one cure this violence and war, this lieing and stealing and calling women whores, this killing of men, the raping of women, the destruction of childrens innocence, no longer living as hypocrites

 

Comments

[susan letexier]

I do not know how old this person who wrote this, but it is very insitefull and thought provoking.
thank you

[Jessica]

this is really good!!

[J]

:)

[M T F]

Very insightful poem. I would say this poem actually sounds like song lyrics to me. It has an interesting rhyme/rhythm scheme. I really like the first stanza: it has more visual, concrete images. The one thing I was really taught to avoid in poetry is the abstractions (love, truth, humanity, etc). These seem "poetic", but sometimes are less powerful than specific sense images. This advice may or may not work with what you are trying to achieve through this poem. Hope this was helpful.